This is just a part of my paper.
Basically, it’s about the history of wine.
I would like to make it more solid and persuasion.
I feel like I just provide some information of history instead of writing a paper.

If possible, could you please add something to connect with the first two topics.
Also, is it possible to add some images and videos? (If no images and videos, that’s totally fine.)

(I uploaded my draft and the full version. )